The government pay university tuition for students. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Students
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should be paid
university
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tuition
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by the
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government
. While it is true that it brings some
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, I would argue that its benefits are greater. Regarding
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tuition
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the tuition
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fee
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in
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for
students
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,
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brings many benefits.
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, it may reduce
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burden for
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which helps them concentrate more on their studies.
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, their academic performance
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positively.
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tuiton
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tuition
for a year, my brother had to work
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to
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.
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, he got expelled from
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because he lacked too many credits.
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, there are many
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attend to
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which
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to the quality of education may be enhanced.
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, paying
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a fee
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for
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in
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or college could help
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the poor
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student
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have a chance to pursue higher education, which could make the quality of
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improved.
Besides
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its benefit,
students
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do not have to pay
university
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tuition
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has some drawbacks.
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,
students
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might not be grateful for their studies.
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, they could skip lectures or not do
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the assignment
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.
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result
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in wasting government money.
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, having many
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and colleges, so if the government want to remain
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policy, they have to spend a huge of money.
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leads to
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of money for other sectors
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as health care or
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and
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some problems. Meanwhile,
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student
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students
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do
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not pay
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fee
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at
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has some disadvantages, I believe that it is better to have the advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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