Some high school require all students to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies you think is better?

Nowadays it is often argued that whether the wearing
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uniform
to the centre of learning. Because few high schools are demanded all pupils to wear
school
outfits while other higher academies are allowed pupils to do what they want. I strongly support wearing the
uniform
of the
school
in college.
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wearing
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uniform
at
school
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, the discipline starts
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students
wear dress
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in
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the institution
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institution
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. Because it is one of the vital issues
in
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school
period.
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my experience, in
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always
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all scholars before coming to
academy
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.
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, the government provides free
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uniforms
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to every pupil and it must be valuable for some
students
who come
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familiers
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families
.
Secondly
, when
student
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wear
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the
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uniforms they do not worry about their new clothes. And
uniform
is a comfortable dress for
students
and do not be discomfort.
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, there are
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negative portions despite positive approaches.
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, buying
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dress code
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is
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of money
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because few academies could not provide free outfits to their
students
and the pupils have to buy
themselves
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. To sum up, in my point of view
students
ought to wear
uniform
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the uniform
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of
school
and they must be comfortable for all
students
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