Some believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
People have different options regarding fitness competitions.
While
many nations sports games are more stressful for the community, particularly Change preposition
In
young
generations.That's why they do have not to participate in sports activities.Correct word choice
younger
This
essay will examine cases of this
action and the forthcoming paragraphs discussed
both the agreement and the disagreement sides.
On the one hand,the basic disadvantage is that the play competitions give the public a feeling of more emotions. Wrong verb form
discuss
In other words
,nowadays fitness games become a gamble so youngsters spend their own money on that type of physical event, the consequences of this
action they may be losing
their sums or maybe seldom Wrong verb form
lose
winning
.Wrong verb form
win
Additionally
,the stress the play races affect
people's brainsCorrect subject-verb agreement
affects
,
because Remove the comma
apply
that
sorts of activities give the public enough adrenalin. Correct determiner usage
those
For example
, I remember several years ago, I was interested bet money on fitness activities, and as a result
, I lose
my monthly income.
Wrong verb form
lost
Turn
off the other hands of Wrong verb form
Turning
argument
, the main advantage is that play events lead the population to a healthy lifestyle.To put it another way,it is a good method to encourage the population to live Correct article usage
the argument
exact
ways.Because, presently, we can see that society tends to do harmful habits like smoking, drinking alcohol and so on. In turn, physical races play an essential role in every human life.Change preposition
in exact
Moreover
, the youngsters have their favourite athletes and people try to repeat their game player's actions. For instance
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of Ranaldo and the other parts support Messi.
In conclusion, I do not support Correct your spelling
fans
this
statement and I think sports competitions more important part of our society.Submitted by khushnudrustamovich on
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