Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extend to you agree?

It is argued that educational systems should give similar opportunities to both men and women to get
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into different
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. I totally agree with
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argument because
this
will create an equal situation among all genders and
also
females are doing better than
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in some subjects. One of the main reason
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both
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in
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field of
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and gives them
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opportunities in all
universities
around the world.
For example
, in many
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countries, one can find an equal system in accepting
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in the same fields regardless
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sex.
This
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they have the chance to study
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the same subject as men in a suitable space to present new ideas and enrich their skills. Another noticeable reason why gender is not the main case in studying different subjects is the student's merit rather than their gender-specific.
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masculine or feminine does not affect their ability to perform.
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at
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achievement background
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their gender.
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, a recent study has
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that most colleges select candidates based on their performance and not whether they are men or women.
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, an equal administration of students in colleges will
also
improve the
universities
reputation. To conclude, educational institutes like
universities
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but should accept them by their merit and give females
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opportunities as male applicants.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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