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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of people prefer
traveling
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 to other countries for pleasure while others claim that it can have a contrary influence on the place
traveled
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 to. From my point of view, tourism leads to deteriorating consequences
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 as contamination of the environment and depletion of
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. The
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 thing to consider is pollution which can be created by tourists. On account of a great number of visitors, there is a high probability of the area being polluted with various waste
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 as plastic bottles, trash, etc. Not only does it affect the surroundings, but it
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 can be unpleasant for local people as poor
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 of a tourist is not accepted in any
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, rubbish produced by
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 can destroy the ecosystem of oceans too. Another factor worth noting is the massive use of
resources
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. If a large number of
travelers
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 come to the
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, governments will be responsible for ensuring them with nutrition, accommodations, and entertaining attractions.
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, these kinds of
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 demand a wide range of
resources
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 including water, energy, construction materials, and extensive agricultural fields for food. Even though
traveling
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 can bring a decent amount of budget to a
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, a reduction of
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 can decline the economy. Taking everything into consideration, the negative impacts of
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 to a
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 as contamination of local areas by different trash and intense consumption of
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 can place the government in a grave position. In my opinion, it will be better if authorities take these issues into account and find feasible solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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