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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
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 contemporary world, advancements in shipping and logistics industries have made easy access to foreign food items. According to a few opting for native consumables is not only benefitted to the environment but
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the budget of an individual; I agree with
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 and will discuss why
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 of shipped foods outweigh its advantages. On the positive side, consumable products which are
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 of particular nations are available in major supermarkets in foreign countries allowing people to taste and explore the traditional food of that region.
For instance
, Dates are only cultivated in deserts and
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 exported by the Arab nations.
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 can be provided to
rest
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 of the world to relish the local fruit of Arabs.
On the contrary
, importing foods from global territories
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 complex supply chain and logistics operations which
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 responsible for polluting the environment as well as putting
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 excessive economic burden on buyers.
Instead
, if consumers prefer locally grown items, it will develop economic opportunities for domestic vendors;
moreover
, air pollution can be curtailed as it would not require
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long-distance transportation. To illustrate, rather than buying American nuts, if Indians start buying dried fruits from domestic sellers
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 it will contribute
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 the development of local businesses.
Thus
, I think people should choose local over global edibles. To conclude, many people prefer to eat items which are produced
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 other countries.
However
, along with others, I think it has more drawbacks compared to its pros as imported things are costlier and damaging
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nature. I believe that individuals should eat locally grown products so the local economy can boost as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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