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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while other think that group lessons are superior. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lessons #group
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Different types of classes could benefit
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 to learn better.
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 private
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 seem better to some
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, others consider
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 classes more advantageous. Personally, I believe both are equally beneficial and it depends on the course. On the
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 hand,
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-on-
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 learning may boost learners’ progress. The tutor can focus on students’ weaknesses to improve them
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 in
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, everyone's needs should be considered. It is usually important for those who want to learn something in a short time.
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 type of learning
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 has the advantage of more practising which usually results in better comprehension.
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, it is far more rational to have a private class to prepare for IELTS because the tutor can teach you exactly what you need to improve
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 if you attend a
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 class, that will be impossible and it may negatively affect your progress.
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, learning in groups could
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 be beneficial at some points.
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, it helps
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 to have more communication which has a positive impact on their self-esteem. In today's world,
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 need to improve their communication skills to progress and attending a
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 lesson is
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 of the best ways for that.
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, many
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 tend to procrastinate their learning if they want to participate in a private class
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this
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 may not happen in
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 because they probably feel responsible to their peers.
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 type of learning is likely to be more appropriate for difficult
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 or those in which they are less interested. In conclusion, It seems to me that depending on the type of the course both
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-on-
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lessons
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 and
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 classes are appropriate. The former is better to learn something quickly and improve
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's weaknesses
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 the latter is superior for communication skills and motivation.
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Task Response
Well done in addressing the task prompt by discussing both views and providing a clear opinion. Make sure to provide more specific examples to further support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay demonstrates a good logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Ensure smooth transitions between ideas to enhance coherence further.
Task Response
Addressed both viewpoints and provided a balanced opinion
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion
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