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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people advocate that unpaid community services should be a part of secondary schools. Indeed, to my mind, there is
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 convincing evidence that the schools are the best teachers of life. I agree with
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him his parents, friends and relatives.
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different government establishment, one of
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 is the schools. During our
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 years, we participated in charity and spiritual and moral education programs. Which educates
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each pupil
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 desire for a good, healthy lifestyle, respect and love for the surrounding nature, Motherland,
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. Another reason is that a person goes to
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 years the children know nothing
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environment
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 world. According to my own experience, at the high
school
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school
 on the pedestrian sign. To get interested in the process, we were given special cards of a traffic police officer, and a traffic controller's baton. When a
school
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, we used a baton to stop cars.
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community services should be part of high
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 because
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school
 periods the teachers become
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role
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 for pupils.
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 how to live and
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humanity
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 at all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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