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People should keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree

There is an idea that citizens need not pay any
taxes
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,
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instead
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 they should save it by keeping
at
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 home. I totally disagree with
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 statement because it can lead to creating a shadow economy and
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government
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 may become poorer. The main reason why I believe that not paying
for
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apply
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taxes
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 is
bad
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a bad
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 idea
because
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is because
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 as a consequence there might be
shadow
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a shadow
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 economy which
follow
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follows
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number
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a number
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 of drawbacks.
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, if people start to hide their income from
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government
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the government
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 they would
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to
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apply
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begin another type of
criminals
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criminal
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 related
with
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to
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money
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.
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,
person's
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people
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 could spend hidden
money
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 on drugs or
weapon
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weapons
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. As well as
this
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,
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government
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the government
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 being poorer and poorer can not support social facilities
such
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 as
rouds
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roads
, hospitals and education.
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, it can lead to a high
criminal
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crime
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 rate, which is by far
negative
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a negative
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 indicator in front of
global
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the global
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 world. Another reason why I do not support mentioned notion is the average
parametr
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parameter
 of literacy and
destructive
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its destructive
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 effect
to
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on
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 children. There would be
lack
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a lack
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 of
money
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whether
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if
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 people do not pay compulsory
taxes
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.
Moreover
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,
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government
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a government
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 with
money
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problem
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problems
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 could not provide
sufficent
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sufficient
 living
condition
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conditions
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.
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, it goes without saying that, the poor
government
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 can not build schools,
kindegardens
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kindergartens
kindergarten
, universities.
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, offspring will grow up without literacy,
also
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 they can not become a well-rounded individual. To illustrate, we can mention Afghanistan, which
suffer
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suffers
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 from practically all sorts of socio-economic issues. In conclusion, I completely disagree with that the argument which
claim
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claims
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 people should not pay
for
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apply
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taxes
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, because
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it
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in
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it
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 can lead
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catastrophic
catastrofic
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to catastrofic
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 damage to
economy
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the economy
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 of
nation
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the nation
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 and without
taxes
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government
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 can not solve any social problems
such
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 as illiteracy, poverty and
kriminal
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criminal
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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