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some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recucled . They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legalo requirement . To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste ?

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There is no doubt that an insufficient amount of trash from homes is recycled so some people believe that to solve
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 recycling products. I believe exploring the cause of
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 problem can assist in finding
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suitable
 solutions to help resolve it.
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, a lack of information is more likely to contribute individuals to waste things without thinking about
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 them.
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, governments should raise environmental awareness about recycling,
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,
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 can consider some public regulations to
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 the proportion of their trash in each region.
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, Finland and
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 are extremely successful in recycling most of their daily waste because their citizens are aware of the advantages of recycling.
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, another point to consider is the fact that governments can address
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 issue by contributing individuals to do volunteer projects in order to
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motivate experts who can lead and prepare local communities to adapt
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 to recycling
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 it requires too much effort
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 countries
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 as Australia establish an environmental organization to educating volunteers and, in turn, people embrace
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 method and develop a
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 of responsibility about the nature.
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, they yield desirable results. To conclude, I think the
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 the
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government
 can make a
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legal
requirment
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requirement
 and raise public awareness
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 it can manage a volunteer project and remedy the situation. In my opinion, these are steps in the right direction.
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