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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
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 who are famous are almost always followed by paparazzi and the
media
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 in general for coverage
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 their activities as
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 usually helps the publications achieve higher readership or viewership. An indirect impact of
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 is that popular personalities have their
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 invaded regularly.
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 doesn't treat the
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 of the famous in a fair manner and should observe proper limits regarding
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 aspect. Some
people
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 believe that the stars have a price to pay regarding their
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, for being famous. The main reason for
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 is that the well-known sometimes use the attention to their advantage.
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, the recent wedding of the Indian actress Priyanka Chopra and the American singer Nick Jonas was publicized by the two to a great extent even though it was supposed to be a very private event.
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, some are of the opinion that it is acceptable to engage in the extraction of private information regarding the famous. Others believe that even though it is common for the well-known to be heavily pursued by the
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, they deserve
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fair treatment when it comes to their
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. The main reasons are that some of the popular
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 persons have a slew of personal, emotional and psychological problems while some others are introverted and need their own private space. Sri Smitha
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 was an extraordinary Indian actor but had a very complex personality and because she was heavily pursued by
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, she committed suicide since her personal problems were exposed by the
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 to the public. For
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 their fair share of
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. All humans regardless of their popularity should be well treated when it comes to
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matters of
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. In
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 we discussed the main reason why some
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 believe that it is normal to invade the
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 of famous
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 while others believe that it's important to treat the famous fairly. For the reasons argued in the essay, I strongly believe that
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 should respect the
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 of famous personalities. 1 year ago53 Likes
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