You recently received a letter from a friend asking for an advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. you think that he should get a job write a letter to your friend.

Dear Santosh, I received your letter. I am very happy with you

that

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shared with me what u have a problem

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I suggest

you

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that in your current situation, getting a

job

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is better than studying. I can understand that you are in trouble. I felt very sad hearing your father has died. I am so sorry for that. Now, you are alone to handle your family. I strongly believe that you can adjust to your family by doing a

job

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. I think It is the most important for your mother's health and your sister's studies.

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, It will help to save money for your

further

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study.

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, you should apply for

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job

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a job

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, you have a good experience of a

job

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that's why you will have easy for looking a

job

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that will make your problem solve

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some extent. If you want to do work with me, I will keep your problem to my boss and I hope he will recruit you

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because my company is seeking

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manpower with qualified that already you have. So, in

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this

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your

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situation study is not suitable for you

than

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then

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financial support will help your current situation. At

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last

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I trust you that you will decide on my advice and as soon as possible u will contact me about

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job

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the job

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. I am looking forward to hearing from you. yours sincerely, Bimal

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Apr 21, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

230 words

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