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Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In
this
 contemporary era, news channels ought to provide more positive information in their programs. I agree as much as disagree with
this
 notion. My inclination is justified
further
 with reasons and examples. On the one hand, it is often believed by many people that media should display meaningful details in recent days.
This
 is because
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 it spread positivity among the individuals in society. It helps people to overcome unnecessary fear. As
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 nowadays increasing numbers of television industries are focusing on the negative reports
such
 as crimes and smuggling which manipulate youngster's minds in the wrong direction. For an instance, continuously showing crimes scenes on BBC news on television will negatively affect the youth; they will try to learn or implement criminal activities in their real lives.
On the other hand
, sometimes mass media broadcasts important headlines which make people aware of specific events. To elaborate on
this
, many times the details about life-threatening conditions viral among the audience through numerous social-media events.
For example
, in the previous ,year the life-saving precautions to overcome the effect of the corona pandemic were provided by most of the mediums of the report
such
 as radio spots and adverts. In conclusion, notwithstanding the
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 need to represent more grateful info
however
 in some emergencies they should provide awareness by illustrating negative news in the community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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