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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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In the
last
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 few years, due to some reasons,
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people
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the people
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 who are interested in researching and understanding the
history
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 of
their
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 houses or apartment, in which they are living, is gradually increasing. There are lots of reasons that
refers
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 to the fact that
people
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 are valuing
their houses
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the history of their house
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history
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.
Such
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 as,
the
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historical
knowledges
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knowledge
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 were not valued enough a few years ago, but as
the
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time goes by, it has been changing slightly to the point that now, it is regarded as one of the most valuable
information
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 in the eyes of society.
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, the
history
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 of your home may be more precious than you think. Some
people
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 think that the possibility of a worthy historical story deserves the effort that they put
in
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 their research, which is a logical belief because at some points it can significantly change their life due to the fact that the more worthy
house
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, the more money will be spent for buying the
house
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 by
people
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 who appreciate these kinds of houses.
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 there are various reasons, there are not many ways for finding out about historical stuff and it needs considerable
efforts
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.
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 of all, you can start searching by asking
neighbors
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, but
obviously
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,obviously
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 you should ask elder ones or persons who are living in
this
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 area for a long time and knows about old
neighbors
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neighbours
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 whose
house
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 was yours,
then
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 when you get some information about the old owners, you should start the
second
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 step which is looking for them and ask them about their family or their stories to tell and if it was needed you should ask about older
neighbors
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. By continuing
this
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 routine, you may find a worthy
history
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 that deserves all of these efforts or if you do not care about the worthiness, you might have achieved to lots of information about your
house
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, but you can't make the assumption that there is not the possibility of facing a big failure at the end. In conclusion, due to some beliefs, which
has
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 been changing during
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last
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the last
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 years,
people
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is
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 becoming more interested in researching about their
house
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's
history
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, there are
bunch
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 of ways that you can put into action,
although
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 they are significantly hard.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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