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Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#businesses #companies #outweigh
These days we have a large number of successful and high
companies
. So, the competition is vastly strong.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and will my personal conclusion.
Firstly
, in any sector have two ways
one
 of the dark and even no light but, maybe it is the right
one
 opposite the other
one
 could its start shiny while the end destroyer.
That is
 why
people
 should have fathe and a brave heart to lose or win. On the
one
 hand, the small businesses did not disappear ,
on the contrary
, grown until they came
one
 of the large
companies
.
For example
, If someone has a passion for what it has, could find a way to raise their dreams. So,
that is
 why some
people
 failed because they do have no net goal and they want to be succussed without having hard work.
On the other hand
, large multinational
companies
 did not start as large
companies
 except for some. To illustrate, many talented
people
 have had wealthy families and that gives them a fast push.
Hence
 the belief that if an individual failed do not stop trying because someone climbed fast than you and the safe rise will be a fast crash.
In addition
, some
people
 have money but without strong ,ideas while the others have it but are needed.
For instance
, rich humans without reason they should think about how could let themself in a safe situation and
that is
 a risk for both sides.
Moreover
, could that rich person stel the poor idea for good business and for the wealthy could not be gorgeous though.
This
 proves clearly that a blind deal. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of different views, I believe that we could not guarantee the future so why do we still have fear of taking a stip.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Displacement
  • Economies of scale
  • Local economies
  • Standardization
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Personalized service
  • Innovation
  • Community investments
  • Environmental impact
  • Competitive prices
  • Tax contributions
  • Job losses
  • Cultural diversity
  • Local employment opportunities
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