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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for an advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. you think that he should get a job write a letter to your friend.

#friend #advice #college #job
Hi Elina. How are you! I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I have heard about you will apply to the university in London. Unfortunately, I think
this
 is not a decent idea. In your letter, you said that the advantages of going to University.
However
, my opinion is you should apply for the job. Because at the end of the month you will have a decent amount from your bank which will help to financial stability.
Moreover
, in the future experience will be the key point of career development.
Therefore
 from the beginning, the opportunity to enhance your knowledge and experience by doing a job. I would suggest that you are good enough at the English and computer. So you can find a job in a hotel or a supermarket cashier. It will be helpful to enhance your skills. I think you have a good sense of it. I looked forward to your kind feedback. Thisara
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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