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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. Towhat extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement #towhat #laws
The unable recycling
waste
 has been increasing over the years.
People
 say it is
a
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government
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 responsibility to enact laws to solve the problem. I completely agree that the
government
’s role could be an effective tool for reducing
the
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waste
. In
this
 essay, I will outline how
government
 can be a big part of
this
. Every day, each household creates a large amount of trash from living life.
People
 always find easy ways to eliminate
waste
 from their
home
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homes
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 by gathering it in one basket and throw away at once. Due to laziness,
people
 who tend to throw away their
litters
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litter
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 will always continue doing it regardless. If the
government
 impose
regulation
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regulations
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 related to
waste
 management, citizens would be scared of the punishments or fines they will get.
For instance
, in Singapore, the authority established the law about gums are not allowed
chewing
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 in public.
Consequently
,
community
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the community
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 regarding travellers would abide by inevitably.
In addition
, governments could play a huge role
on
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in
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 shaping
people
 to tackle the struggle together.
To implement
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 the laws related to trash is the most effective means that will stimulate
people
 to obey.
As a result
, Not only does it help
creating
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 the human’s sense of habit to care about the result of separating the trash, but it
also
 establishes the culture of the society which
it
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may produce the tourists’ awareness. To illustrate, tourists visiting
to
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Japan tend to separate
waste
 into groups due to the law the
government
 created which is now a unique habit of
Japanese
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the Japanese
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. To conclude,
although
 there is
individual’s
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an individual’s
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 responsibility to enable the habit and culture, the
government
 could take part in and solve the issue by
enact
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 the laws. It is the fastest way to solve the problem.
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