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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is believed by some that it is essential to spend a noticeable amount of money on the construction of new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 between
cities
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.
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, others reckon that these resources should be invested in the improvement of existing public
transport
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. In my opinion, it is best to invest in public
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first
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. In
this
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 essay, both views and the main reason for my opinion will be discussed.
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 with, some think that we must invest in constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 between
cities
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.
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 can have many benefits for those who travel often.
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, many businessmen and businesswomen have to travel constantly between different states and
cities
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 and constructing new
railway
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lines
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 can facilitate their travel.
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,
trains
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 are cheaper for travelling between
cities
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 and states and they are
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 more convenient and more comfortable than other types of
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such
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 as aeroplanes.
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, not many people use
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 mode of
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.
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, a huge investment in
trains
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 may not be a wise choice.
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, some reckon that
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 investment should be in existing public
transport
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. expansion in the capacity of public
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 and their facilities is more beneficial. It is best to enhance the quality of buses and subways in the city. Taking Japan ,
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, they have placed libraries in subways that allow the public to read books and it encourages them to use
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 mode of
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 more often.
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, many improvements can be seen in public
transport
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. To conclude, some think that it is necessary to spend a large amount of money on constructing new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 and some reckon that we should use it to improve public
transport
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. In my view, it is best to focus on public
transport
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 because it has a bigger effect on society. Given the current circumstances, a rise in the usage of public
transport
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 will be seen.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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