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Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #countries #society #immigrants #customs #codes #behavior
The chart demonstrates how often
people
 in the United States ate in fast-food
restaurants
 in 2003 and 2006 and
also
 2013.
To begin
 with, the rate of Americans who go to fast-food
restaurants
 once in a while has not changed significantly.
For instance
, the rate of
people
 who go to those
restaurants
 once a week increased only a few per cent in 2006 and
then
 it had a slight decrease.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
people
 who show extreme behaviours like going to these
restaurants
 every day or never, had any noticeable change over time.
For example
, the rate of those who never went to
such
restaurants
 decreased by only a few per cent. Overall, most
people
 go to fast-food
restaurants
 once or twice a week or month.
However
,
those
Change preposition
for those
show examples
 who never go there or always go there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 less than 5 per cent and no substantial change can be seen over time.
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