Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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studying by watching
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can expand their horizon, in my
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by
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television have
various
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negative impact.
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, programs
usually
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made interesting to attract more
follower
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,
thus
people
might pay more attention
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the interest parts rather
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essentials knowledge.
By contrast
,
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reader
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usually can
immersed
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in the book easily because
their
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are not many
attraction
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during individuals’ reading, the time for reading often lonely and focused. Imagination
developing
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and language skills learning can be more
efficiency
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by reading books rather than watching
TV
. It is because individuals can not
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by themselves and training language skills when they are watching television.
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, even
people
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are looking a
TV
show about learning, they can hardly have
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idea
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,
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because audiences are quick to receive
a
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new things just after they listen
what
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TV
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program told them, they can seldom think deeply.
By contrast
,
people
can stop reading and use some notes to record their private ideas when they have some thoughts.
Moreover
,
people
can underline some sentences which have grammar they
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not know. If individuals did these acts during the reading,
the
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language skills would
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significantly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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