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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
WHERE COLLECTED TAXES SHOULD BE SPENT HAS ALWAYS BEEN A CONFLICTED TOPIC. NOWADAYS SOME THINK THAT MONEY SHOULD BE SPENT ON
RAILWAYS
 MORE THAN ON ROADS. I TOTALLY AGREE WITH
THIS
 STATEMENT AND
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHY GOVERNMENTS SHOULD IMPROVE
RAILWAYS
.
FIRSTLY
, THE IMPROVEMENT OF
RAILWAYS
 WILL DECREASE AIR POLLUTION AND ITS DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS ON HUMAN BEINGS. TO EXTEND, SINCE IT WILL EASE COMMUTE AND INCREASE THE COMFORT OF TRAVEL, MORE
PEOPLE
 WILL PREFER TO USE PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION AND AS A ,RESULT DECREASING USED VEHICLES WILL PROTECT THE WORLD.
SECONDLY
, INVESTMENTS IN
RAILWAYS
 WILL PROVIDE CITIZENS PRIVATE
TIME
 AND THEY CAN SPEND MORE
TIME
 ON ACTIVITIES WHICH ARE SELECTED BY THEMSELVES
AS A RESULT
PEOPLE
 MAY FEEL MORE SATISFIED WITH THEIR LIVES. TO EXPAND, DUE TO ENHANCING THE COMFORT OF PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION MORE
PEOPLE
 WILL PREFER TO TRAVEL WITH TRAINS OR UNDERGROUND VEHICLES AND OBVIOUSLY TRAVELLING WITH VEHICLES WHICH ARE DRIVEN BY OTHER
PEOPLE
 WILL FUNCTION AS A
TIME
 SAVER.
PEOPLE
 CAN HANDLE THEIR TASKS BEFORE ARRIVING AT THEIR HOMES ON THE TRAIN AND WHEN THEY REACH TO THEIR HOMES, THEY CAN REST WITHOUT ANY GUILT. TO SUM UP, IN TODAY’S MODERN AND HECTIC LIFE THE WORLD SHOULD BE PROTECTED FROM HUMAN BEINGS’ HORRIBLE BEHAVIOURS AND
PEOPLE
 NEED MORE
TIME
 TO SPEND THEIR SPECIAL PLEASURES. INVESTMENTS IN
RAILWAYS
 MORE THAN ROADS MAY PROVIDE THESE MENTIONED FEATURES.
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