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The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause today and what can be done to solve these problems?

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Many old
buildings
 in the city attach great historical and architectural value to the residents.
However
, because of the rapid change in modern society, these impractical
buildings
also
 cause some problems. Reconstruction and reuse are needed in solving these difficulties. The abandoned house will cause a burden on the development of the city. On the one hand, the old
buildings
 cover an amount of land without any practical use, and
this
 will exacerbate the shortage of urban land resources.
On the other hand
, maintaining the safety and neatness of old architecture is money-consuming and time-consuming, which will leave the local government under heavy pressure.
For example
, the government may lack money for the instruction of fundamental infrastructure due to the high cost of maintenance. One effective measure to solve
this
 is reconstructing these
buildings
 with a long history. Through reconstructing, the designer can redesign the internet structure with more modern elements. The unfashioned building will be more comfortable and suitable for people to live in.
For example
, equipped with comfortable office desks and computers, the old house can be an ideal place for working. Another practical way is turning some valuable architecture into touring spots that are open to the public. The earnings could be used for the building's daily maintenance, which not only could maximize the value of the traditional
buildings
 but
also
 share the burden of government.
For example
, the famous old palace museum used to be a palace lived by the ancient emperor and their relatives. Now, it has attracted thousands of tourists from all over the world as a museum with countless precious heritage. From my perspective,
although
 the reservation of architecture existing for a long time will cause some problems, people can discover
is
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 modern value through reconstruction and reuse.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • housing shortages
  • degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • accessibility
  • sustainable urban planning
  • smart city technologies
  • green technology
  • regulations
  • sustainable
  • integrated
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian
  • cycling infrastructure
  • reliance
  • mitigate
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