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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 believe that living in a foreign
country
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 where they have to speak another
language
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 can cause serious social
problems
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 and
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 practical
problems
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. In my opinion not being able to communicate with the
people
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 in your new community
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is a great impairment.
People
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 are social beings and the need to socialize and bond with others is a fundamental human need that must be met. The incapacity to speak your ideas, thoughts,
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 can make someone feel frustrated and very unhappy. We all have the innate need to be heard and understood. Humans have
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 a fundamental need to belong so not being able to speak the foreign
language
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 of the new
country
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 where you have moved
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will be an obstacle
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 making friends and interacting with
people
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. About the practical
problems
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 that the inability to speak the foreign
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 of the
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were
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 you now live, I believe that some issues can arise in the day to day life. You could not communicate your needs and your clinical symptoms to the doctor at the city hospital in case of an emergency.
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 you could not speak your
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 to the bank or to the city council. You even would not be able to communicate your needs to the supermarket or
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ask for help
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 your
neighbors
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. In the
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 I strongly agree that living in a
country
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 where you have to speak a
language
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 that you do not know
it
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apply
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can cause serious social and practical
problems
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. The inability to speak, to communicate, makes life harder for any individual who finds
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himself
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 in
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 a situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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