People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

Nowadays, advertisements could be easily found everywhere,
for instance
: on the internet, on TV,
phones
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and
billboards
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on billboards
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in the streets, which are increasingly influencing
people
's lifestyles in both positive and negative ways. Some
people
say that it's not a problem, but I disagree.
To begin
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positive side, it can be emphasised that advertising provides a way for producers to reach consumers. Advertising introduces a new product that
otherwise
would not be seen by consumers, which increases sales
thus
increasing producer’s profits and improving the economy. To illustrate, a billboard at the bus stop representing the KFC on the
next
street will increase sales and profits.
Moreover
,
advertise
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can serve as an example of good publicity.
On the other hand
, advertising can be used as a mass weapon in the wrong hands. The constant flood of advertisements can result in excessive waste of money.
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, sometimes the crowd overshop and buy items they fully don't need, some get addicted to shopping.
Furthermore
, promotions
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are built from false
instruction
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.
Such
advertising can affect our society, especially the younger generation. Due to the
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minors still have tiny real soul experience and any word dramatically influences them.
For example
, when cigarette companies were opened early in history, misinformation was spread about smoking benefits.
As a result
, deceived
people
were met with awful losses. To conclude,
although
advertising improves the economy and benefits shops and manufacturers, I believe the tendency of
people
to spend and the specific marketing are being used maliciously
thus
should be stopped or monitored.
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