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your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs in order to save money write a letter to the city council

#council #sport #leisure #center #money #city
Good day, My name is Clarissa Smith and I live on Sesame
street
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 in the city of Longisland.
However
, for the
last
 5
years
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 my home was in the area of
this
 local council.
This
 was a great place to live for me and my family. I have to say, that the sport and leisure
center
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 was the best place for us to relax.
Firstly
, I have made a lot of friends there and new
acquaintences
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acquaintances
. Social relationships are very important for the
wellbeing
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 of our community and
this
center
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 is helping us to socialize and keep our levels of happiness up.
On the other hand
, exercise is of great importance for our community health. As far as I know, a lot of my neighbours are doing sports at the local
center
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. In my opinion, closing down our
center
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 of relaxation and exercise
it
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will bring a lot of sadness in
out
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our
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 town.
Nevertheless
, I have to say that closing the sport and leisure
center
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 in our
neighborhood
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, will not save you money.
This
 will result in negative outcomes in
people
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 lives which will affect their productivity levels and contentment.
Finally
, I kindly request for
reconsidering
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 your decision of closing the
center
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 of sport and leisure. Sincerely Yours, Mahatma Gunderson
Submitted by Carmela on

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