it is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. this money should be spent on buildings on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Society, without any doubt, is divided into two groups as per the distinct mindsets of
people
. It is often argued that
people
must take care and furnish ancient buildings, whilst others think that money should be spent on constructing new buildings.
Although
it is crucial to construct the latest building, I firmly believe that money should be spent to look after historic buildings.
To begin
with, it is extremely costly to preserve ancient structures but it is essential to preserve them because
it
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signifys
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signifies
an old era of human civilization. If they
are not preserve
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, they will eventually
vanished
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and an important part of history will be removed. As an illustration, The Statue Of Liberty in New York tell us about the freedom war fought in the USA to free slaves.
Hence
, they should be maintained
otherwise
, the future
people
will be clueless about the past.
Furthermore
, these structures should
also
be
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conserve
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because they attract international tourists.
Consequently
,
this
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in
financial
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growth of local
people
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business as well as a country's economy.
For instance
, The King Faisal palace in Al Ulah has become the top tourist destination in the KSA in
last
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five years.
Therefore
, the Saudi government spends millions of dollars to protect it. In conclusion, it
is claim
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that
instead
of investing money
on
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building new structures as they play a very important role in a country's economy.
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essay completely
agree
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with
this
notion.
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