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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Home is the place where
people
 rest after a long day at work. Nowadays,
people
 are able to choose whether to buy or rent a place to live in. I believe
this
decision
 mainly depends on their situation and financial status.
Instead
 of renting, buying a
house
 is more desirable when
people
 have enough
money
 since they don't need to trouble themselves to pay the rent fee every month or every year to the landlord.
Moreover
, buying a
house
allow
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allows
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people
 to freely renovate their houses
however
 they like,
such
 as establishing a swimming pool or creating a garden in front of the
house
.
Besides
,
house
 ownership
also
 boosts
people
's confidence and motivation because it represents the result of their arduous journey of working for years.
In addition
, buying a
house
 is essential when
people
 choose to live in a specific area for the rest of their lives.
In contrast
, I believe renting is more economical compared to owning a
house
 for
people
 who don't have enough
money
 or for those who are saving
money
 for other purposes.
Furthermore
, buying a
house
 becomes a waste of
money
 especially for workers who have to move constantly
due to
 their job. In conclusion, either owning or renting a
house
 is not a bad
decision
. In my opinion, the
decision
 depends on
people
's economic status and their situation at work. For
people
 who have enough
money
 and are planning to live forever in a certain area, I believe it is more desirable to buy a
house
.
However
, for those who have limited
fundings
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 and have to move often due to their work, renting becomes a more convenient
decision
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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