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fuel price has been increasing. what should we do?

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Introduction
Humans know that
fuel
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 usage is increasing day by day, but the thing is that there are other
resources
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 as well.
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, the question is
that
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would it be smart to
also
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use
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 those
resources
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? In the recent decade, the lifestyle has changed, and we are lacking
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 energy. The problem of low
fuel
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 has brought up the argument that these
resources
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 should be used,
nevertheless
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 some say they should not be used. There are some
advantages
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 and disadvantages regarding
this
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 issue.
Body paragraph 1
Even though the number of children in families has decreased, their expectation has risen. Families these days have the same number of
cars
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 based on the number of their family members. Another thing
that is
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 making
fuel
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 usage higher is that technology has been improving and for
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 there are new factories. These factories each
use
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 a whole lot of
fuel
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 themselves and are one of the biggest reasons for our
fuel
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resources
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 disappearing,
this
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 has made humans
use
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 those untouched
resources
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.
Body paragraph 2
This
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 debate has made some people believe that extracting those uncovered
resources
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 has some
advantages
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 for the people.
Fuel
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 has made life easier for mankind, long story short it is affordable. There are
cars
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 out there that
use
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 electricity to work, but the price comparison between electric
cars
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 and gas
cars
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 is just shocking. There are some countries where their only earnings are trading
fossil’s
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fuel
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fuels
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 with other countries. The money
that is
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 made by selling
fuel
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 has even eradicated poverty in some countries, once
fuel
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resources
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 were found.
Nevertheless
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,
fuel
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 is
also
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 easier to transport and
to
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store in than other renewable energies.
Body paragraph 3
However
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, there are a lot of
advantages
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for
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to
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 extracting these untouched, but there are
also
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 some disadvantages. The more
fuel
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 is found and extracted the more scientists will
use
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 them to expand their knowledge and will not be on the search for finding new ways to replace
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 energies as much. Even Though there is plenty of
this
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 source out in the world,
this
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 energy is irreplaceable and will inevitably come to an end. The
next
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 generations will be in lack
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this
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 source just because of the unreasonable amount
that is
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 being used now. Using too much
fuel
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 would
also
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 cause air pollution and more greenhouse gasses would be released,
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additionally
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 it will make the ozone layer thinner.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the disadvantages outweigh the
advantages
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. What
this
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 implies is that our society should be thinking
for
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about
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 the near future and that there will be other generations after us.

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