Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Health
care is vital to all of us some of the time, but public Use synonyms
health
is vital to all of us all of the time.
It Use synonyms
is often argue
that providing more sports Change the verb form
is often argued
facilities
helps to improve public Use synonyms
health
while others believe that there are
other measures need to be considered as well. In my opinion, I believe that Use synonyms
although
expanding Linking Words
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sport
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sports
centers
let Change the spelling
centres
people
more Use synonyms
accessible
to Replace the word
access
health
activities, educating Use synonyms
people
about Use synonyms
health
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also
plays a key role in promoting Linking Words
healthy
lifestyle.
Having convenient Correct article usage
a healthy
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sport
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sports
facilities
certainly makes Use synonyms
the
positive impact on the Correct article usage
a
health
of Use synonyms
community
. Residents in communities get
easily motivated and can have more chances to do physical exercises regularly if athletic Add an article
the community
a community
facilities
are within their reach. As an example, there are the youths who want to join sports Use synonyms
club
but whose parents cannot afford the membership fees are unable to reach out Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
any
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to any
Use synonyms
sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
unless government supports handy fitness and recreational Use synonyms
centers
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centres
such
as gyms, boxing areas and swimming pools at nearby places. Linking Words
Therefore
, Linking Words
availability
of gymnasiums within Correct article usage
the availability
reachable
Add an article
the reachable
area
makes the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
people
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involve
in more fitness activities for their Change the form of the verb
involved
health
.
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However
, when it comes to promoting public Linking Words
health
, increasing Use synonyms
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sport
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sports
facilities
is not the only approach but Use synonyms
also
other measures need to be taken into account. Linking Words
This
includes giving Linking Words
health
education beforehand to the public in order to prevent serious Use synonyms
disease
like cancers and AIDS. Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
For example
, explaining Linking Words
about
the bad consequences of tobacco to the students at schoolsChange preposition
apply
,
can stop them from smoking Remove the comma
apply
that
causes lungs damage in long term. As the saying goes,
prevention is safer than cure, it's much better of spreading information about how to avoid Correct pronoun usage
which
unhealthy
lifestyle. Correct article usage
an unhealthy
Thus
, to create Linking Words
healthful
living, Add an article
a healthful
government
should carefully think out different approaches including introducing Add an article
the government
health
education programs in the communities and at schools.
In conclusion, accessible fitness Use synonyms
facilities
allow Use synonyms
people
easily contribute Use synonyms
in
physical exercises and activities which is good for their Change preposition
to
health
, Use synonyms
however
, that alone is not enough for enhancing public Linking Words
health
status. In my opinion, Use synonyms
in addition
to extending Linking Words
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sport
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sports
facilities
, other strategies are Use synonyms
also
required for improving the Linking Words
health
of the population.Use synonyms
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