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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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In
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 day and age, too many
options
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 are available in various sectors
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worldwide
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world wide
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worldwide
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. Some
people
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 feel overwhelmed by excessive
choices
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 which
results
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 them
difficult
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 in
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 making. In
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essay
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 I'll argue why an overwhelming number of
choices
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 offer more benefits to
people
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 in spite of
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a few
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 drawbacks. As numerous
choices
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 are attainable
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everywhere nowadays, some
people
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 are fatigued and less productive when they face with
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 of
choices
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.
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 is because each
decision
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 reduces the charge of
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 and the person has less energy available to make other
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decision
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 later on.
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, when buying an item at
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a supermarket
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, many
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different
 brands of that item are filled on the rafts which in fact have hardly any meaningful differences and can cause
people
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 to waste
time
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 and energy making
choices
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 with little actual impact.
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, looking into entertainment, there're multiple streaming channels available on
internet
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such
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 as HBO, Netflix and YouTube and
people
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 are spending more
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 exploring the
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most suitable
one
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 in spite of the fact that all of them offer similar services to users. These are
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options
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 can take up
time
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 and make life more complex. Despite
decision
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 fatigue and
time
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 waste, expanded
choices
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opens
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 up
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beyound
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beyond
 limitations. Each of us has our personal preferences and more alternatives let
people
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 satisfy their own particular wants.
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, different
people
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 have different tastes in movies and the same
person
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 likes and dislikes may
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 at different times.
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, having multiple
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 about movies
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 these diverse wants and needs.
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, more
options
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 can be beneficial if it promotes competition among providers that leads to lower prices or improved quality. Suppose that if there are two cafes in a town, there would be competition between the two shops and both would have to
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maintain
 their best quality and services to attract customers' preference. Overall, it's obvious that having too many
options
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 has more advantages in some ways. To conclude,
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 some
population
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 believe that excessive
choices
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 can lead to negative consequences unnecessarily,
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they
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 can
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 have positive impacts on many different areas. In my opinion, despite the challenges and having
hard
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time
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to make
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 decisions, it allows more diverse experiences for everybody all over the world which brings
satisfactoin
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satisfaction
 and improvements to our lifestyle and
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this
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 will continue in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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