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average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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The fluctuation of carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person
of
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 four countries (United Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal) is shown in
this
 graph,
accounted
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 from 1967 to 2007. Overall, the United Kingdom and
Sweden
 successfully decreased
the
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 emission.
On the contrary
, Italy and Portugal
grown
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 higher continuously. At the beginning of the period, the United Kingdom (UK) stood as the highest country contributed to the high number of CO2
in
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 the earth with 12 metric tons.
However
, in the following years, it slightly decreased and ended in 9 metric tons
at
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 2007.
Furthermore
,
Sweden
 experienced
the
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fluctuating years between 1967 and 1977, which decreased and increased dramatically. Apart from
this
, it significantly decreased
at
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 1987 and
finally
 stuck at 5 in 2007. Unlike the UK and
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal faced
the
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 tremendous increase. Both of the countries
begun
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 at
the
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 low number compared to the UK and
Sweden
, it was only 1 and 4,5 respectively. Undoubtedly, Italy and Portugal
were not experienced
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 any decrease at all. In 2007, Italy and Portugal reached 5,5 and 7,5 successively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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