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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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There are many
people
 who believe that we just have to experience one type of
work
 our whole life,
in contrast
, other
people
 think that we should not
work
 at the same
work
 we worked in before,
this
 essay will discuss their perspective and
finally
 will give my personal opinion on their views. On the one hand, there are many
people
 that do not like to change their job,
although
, they may be very tired when they doing the same
work
 every day frequently,
in addition
, they spend much time learning their
work
 and if they alter their
work
 we have to learn again,
for example
, when somebody works in the
company
 many years and during
this
 time they can achieve many experience and skill
then
 try to change that
this
 issues can damage same on the
company
 and workers, for these reasons it is not correct that
people
 left the
company
, especially at long term that
this
 lead to damage on
company
 and workers.
On the other hand
, when a person is aware of their
work
 that it is not suitable for them if they
work
 a few years can alternative their profession, because of, if they have not any fond of
this
 career they should leave that activity before their career to damage their body and their spirit,
for instance
,
furthermore
, many employees around the world have a different illness that related their
work
this
 disease can be physical and psychological and their treatment may be very hard. in conclusion, in my opinion, it is very important that when choosing a job we must to interesting in that
otherwise
,
this
 may be lead to us suffering from different illnesses that can be very difficult to treat, both views depend on a person's condition and should check all of the aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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