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Some people believe that nowdays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that in the present times, we have too many options to choose from.
This
 essay completely agrees with that statement. I believe that people
in
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these days have a
lot
 of decisions to make about what to do and buy, where to go and in
this
 way they are prone to decision fatigue. Humans living today, have a
lot
 of
choices
 to make, from the time they wake up to the moment they fell asleep.They have to decide about which clothes to wear, what food to eat, what car to buy or where to spend their holidays. And for all of
this
 people have a
lot
 of
choices
between
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to decide.
For example
, a family who wants to buy a car,
nowdays
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, have a
lot
 of brands to choose from, and many types of cars from which to make a choice. Having so many decisions to
take
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, every day,
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may lead to decision fatigue. A significant number of people are giving up
at
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 making decisions and they go with the
first
 thing that appears to them
,
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 because they are exhausted
of
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 so many
choices
.
For example
, some choose to dress every day in the same way for not
having
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 to choose what to wear. To conclude, in these moments of our lives, we have too many
choices
 to make in every domain of our day-to-day life and
this
 can be exhausting
some times
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.
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  • overwhelming
  • decision fatigue
  • liberating
  • tailor
  • analysis paralysis
  • abundance
  • expectations
  • satisfaction
  • simplify
  • anxiety
  • illusion of choice
  • consumerism
  • resource depletion
  • restrictive
  • oppressive
  • fulfill potential
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