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Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion

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very sensitive in today’s modern society.
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 concur that capital punishment should be given to those who have offended serious crimes, whilst others suggest that contemporaries do not accept capital forfeiture. The pros and cons of
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 halt and dare not to commit inhumane criminals because of
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 of taking
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 on it.
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under control.
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mankind.
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, the government does not need to spend on security prisons to keep high-risk prisoners locked up, resulting in more investment
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 standard of living.
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 to gibbet is inadmissible because of several reasons.
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 and lives of their families who have relied on the
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. To illustrate that some
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 are wrongfully sentenced because of the rich
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 who have completely committed, by paying money to
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 families.
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 there is no chance for those who have already repented. To sum up, it is noticeable that lives are precious so
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it is better to make big cases small and even small ones disappear by enlightening them.
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, drastic actions should be measured if they committed atrocity and felony.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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