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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Nowadays in most
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the
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countries, being the owner of a
house
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 is
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instead
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 of renting from someone else. In my point of view, owning a residence has both positive and negative on our lives. There are many several reasons that owning a
house
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 is important in many countries.
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, once we owned the
house
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 we don’t have to worry about the finances.
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, it is true that most
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people are working for renting a
house
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 because 50 % of
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 of our income goes for the rental price.
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, we can save
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money for our future since we don’t have to pay for
renting
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.
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, if we have our own space, we can decorate our homes in our ways of styling.
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, many people are impressed
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 being
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 owner of the
house
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,
being
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 obsessed
in
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 owning a
house
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 can be
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 impact on our lives. The thing is that the pressure of being a
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 is always in the mind so that we cannot enjoy our lives fully,
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 we will be stressed and busy with full of work schedules in order to find money to buy a
house
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.
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, we cannot attend
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meeting
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 friends because of our daily schedules.
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, we will be lost our younger days in
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 kind of stress. In conclusion, owning a
house
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 is important for some reasons but it is
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 important that we have to keep balance
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 our everyday activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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