Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some
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like
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to stay and not go to university after high school because it is
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benefit
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for them. I think education
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important but no problem if
student
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check
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other things and
check
if they like it or not and
then
they decide what to do.
Firstly
,
life
for student
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much difficult because
every
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one
want
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best
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education. So all
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putting
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to
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much push for
child
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to get
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score. They go to school
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come back
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comeback
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again go to special tuition
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so
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child
in 12 grade
is
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study
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and
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fun.
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, I see my
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daughter she is in 12 grade in India and she
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tuition for all subject. She
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every morning at 5.00am and
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by 11.00am full
year
.
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stay at mother home for
one
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.
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, it is good
to
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child
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to
check
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interest
first
. Maybe they take
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and
not
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like it at all after some time.
Also
,
one
year
not
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anything not
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loss in
life
it
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is better than
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all
life
. I know
this
from my
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, my best friend push her daughter to become
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and later she did not like it so she drop out to study business. So if we push may
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bad for
child
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. They do better if they
check
the
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interest and
then
go to university. In total, it is good for all children
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time
think
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proper before they go to university because of the benefit. My opinion is for
one
year
stopping
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the study and relax and think
first
and
then
join the course. My daughter did it and is doing good and doing what she
like
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and I really enjoy
one
year
with her after her 12th grade.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • receptive
  • proficiency
  • self-conscious
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • immersive learning
  • engaging language experiences
  • simultaneously
  • mastery
  • resources
  • trained language teachers
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