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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.Discuus both views

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Many
people
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 have an opinion that social
media
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 has
disadvantage
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 effects
for
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people
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 especially
children
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such
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 as
the
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relationships with
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others.
On the other hand
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,others think these applications could gather
people
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 together to do numerous activities. Nowadays,social
media
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 is used by different ages of
people
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especially
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children
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 and
adolescence
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. As the result,these young
people
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 spend time on these
media
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 which affects
them
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on
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apply
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their
relationship
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relationships
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 and social interaction. While they are with their colleagues, they are more likely to look at
screen
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the screen
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more
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apply
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than
talking
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.
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, during dinner time, it is obvious that each person in each family
are
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is
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 less interact
to
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with
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 one another
thesedays
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these days
 because they are too busy
for
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playing social
media
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.
Therefore
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,the negative impacts are lead to
children
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 because of less communication.
On the other hand
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, these sites
has
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have
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an
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the
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 ability to connect
people
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 from different places. The accessibility to
communicate
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communication
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 is a key to
success
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the success
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since
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of
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 the share of interest among others. To illustrate,the red bicycle club on Facebook as it
hathers
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gathers
haters
 all different
people
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 who are interested and passionate
in
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about
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 riding.
Thus
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, there are numerous advantages that
people
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 can receive from social
media
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such
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 as
to find
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finding
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 new friends who
has
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have
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 the same passion
with
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as
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ourselve
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ourselves
. In conclusion, despite the negative effects of
internet
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the internet
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,
people
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 still can gain benefits from it.
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, it is vital for parents to guide their
children
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how
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on how
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 to use it in an
advantage
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advantageous
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 way as they can be successful
for
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in
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 using these applications later on.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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