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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my problem with the printer which I had bought before locking down for Covid. Because of Covid, I had to work at home, so I provided some equipment that I got from your store. The printer worked properly for one month, but
then
, it makes an extra line
that is
 not only very sharp but
also
too
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 tick which makes some words no longer readable. I tried to fix it and changed one of its pieces. But the line still appears.
This
 line causes some details to be covered and it makes the plan unclear. Since our
plan
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are
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 so
detail
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, we need to get
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error
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print
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. Can I return the printer and get the other model? Because I don’t like
this
 model anymore Best regard Mahdi
sohtabi
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Sohrabi
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