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The world we live in is facing a very serious problem of environmental pollution, which has greatly affected the lives of many living things. What are the reasons of threatening environment?

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Today, the world we live in is facing a very serious problem of environmental pollution, which has greatly affected the lives of many living things. There are many causes that are threatening the
environment
such
 as
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 an increase in the number of vehicles, oil spills at sea, littering, waste of energy, inappropriate use of chemicals,
waste
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and waste
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 untreated wastewater into the
environment
.
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 threats have led to global warming, melting ice and
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect. In order to help protect and preserve the
environment
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 I have come up with some solutions that I can implement as follows.
Firstly
, I will do well
the
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 three "R's" rule which
is
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 reduce, reuse and recycle.
This
 is an effective solution that I have researched and learned online.
Second
, I will participate in volunteer clubs to support and plant more trees.
Besides
, I will
also
 propagate and encourage everyone to join hands.
Third
, letting people know about the consequences of environmental pollution is
also
 a way for people to raise their own awareness
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 environmental protection. Through the covid-19 pandemic, when there is less traffic, air pollution has been limited and the ozone layer recovered 15 years faster than expected. From there, it shows that the importance and value of preserving and protecting the
environment
is
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 great.
Therefore
, I hope everyone can
also
 join hands to protect the
environment
 for a green
environment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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