It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays, many schools and families are trying to teach

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, different families have their own ways to teach their

children

, while some parents are having the

punishment

when

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children

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some

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bad things. In my perspective, I think that

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one of the good factors to remind

children

about the terrible things they did, but the parents should have a

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punishment

as well. So in the paragraph below I will show some sorts of

punishment

that I think parents should be followed.

Firstly

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the

children

in their room without any social network is one of the

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that I think

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children

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behavior

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For example

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children

childrens

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are too addicted to

mobile

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phone so if there are no network

children

will have more time to concentrate

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others thing

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and maybe they will change their thoughts.

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, use a little

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violent

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such

as hitting because when

children

did some things wrong

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this punishment

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punishment

will make them fear and remember it,

then

they will not do

this

again

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the

second

time.

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was slapping her

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hand because her boy getting home very late. In summary, I partly agree that having the

punishment

can

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children

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habit

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and

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children

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what should

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and shouldn’t do.

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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