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In some countries, traditional foods are replacing by international fast food. This has a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there
are
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 various
type
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types
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 of
food
 in our society. Most
of
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people
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the people
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prefers
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 eat international
food
 which
are
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 cooked faster and ready for
take
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 away.
In contrast
,
this
make
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 no one eat traditional
food
. In my point of view, I partly agree that it will cause many
of
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negative
effect
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effects
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to
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 our country, the below paragraph will explain why.
First
 of all, the traditional
food
 will be gone soon because if no one
eat
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 the local
foods
 anymore,
then
 all of the local
foods
 will
loss
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 income and close.
Additionally
, the new generation
people
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of people
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 will not even know about
this
 kind of
foods
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food
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.
On the other hand
,
the
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international
food
 can bring you to
convinent
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convenient
 life. According to its name which is fast
food
 so you don’t have to wait for
food
.
For example
, Burker kings
is
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 one of the American Burker company,
it’s
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also
 have a
drive through
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 system that you don’t need to get out
from
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of
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 your car, just order and grab
foods
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food
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. In conclusion, I my perspective I think that we should
be preserve
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the
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traditional
food
 before it’s gone.
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