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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that
kids
 who are raised by low economic
families
 are more capable of dealing with the issues of adult
life
 as compared to the
children
 of wealthier
parents
. I completely agree with
this
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 fact that
children
 who have faced hardship in their childhood are more strong and capable of dealing with problems when they mature. A small child is like
a
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clay , the way we mould them they will adapt in that same way. The
kids
 who are brought up in poor
families
 have limited resources of things whether
its
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food , clothes or toys and they very well learn how to utilize those limited things in a proper way. They are very well taught by their
parents
 from early childhood how to face the problems and deal with them. For
insatance
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instance
 our Prime minister, honourable Narender Modi,
he
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was born in a family with low economic
stutus
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status
, once in an
interview
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 he described his story
how
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of how
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 difficult his childhood was but he struggled, faced lots of problems and his journey took him to
this
 powerful position. So,
kids
 who are raised in poor
families
 are mentally and psychologically more determined to deal with any difficult situation.
However
,
on the other
hand
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 I believe that
children
 raised by wealthier
parents
 are less tolerant to face difficult situations in
life
.
This
 could be because they are provided most of the things by their
parents
 very easily from branded clothes to toys, gadgets or
best
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the best
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 education.They are not that
much
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mentally and emotionally prepared to deal with hardships in their
life
 as
their
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most
of
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desires are easily
fullfilled
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fulfilled
 by their
parents
. So, it
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overall
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over all
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overall
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 depends upon, how the
kids
 grow, in what kind of
enviroment
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environment
 they are nurtured. In
conclusion
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 I think upbringing is very crucial in
overall
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the overall
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 development of a child. So,
children
 who are raised by not so well off
parents
 are more metally stronger to cope with difficult situations in
life
 as compared to
kids
 who belong to wealthier
families
.
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