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The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One of the problems in Urban areas nowadays is the
amount
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 of
traffic
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 it sustains. It is quite a hassle for
people
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 living and working in the city areas as the
amount
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 of time it takes for
people
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 to go from point A to point B is not a joke. At
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 stage,
people
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 are trying to be innovative and creative with ideas to reduce the
amount
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 of
traffic
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 in
cities
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, one of which is reducing
people
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's requirement to travel to and from
work
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,
education
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, or even shopping. In my opinion,
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 is a great idea to reduce
traffic
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 in
cities
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. Working from home has been quite a norm now due to the impacts of Covid-19. It has certainly moulded our daily lifestyle and the way we do things. While most of us are already working from home for a couple of years now, it doesn't seem like a bad idea at all. It reduces the cost of
traveling
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 to
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, it saves a lot of time and
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 the
traffic
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 has eased in
cities
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. Continuing to do so makes more sense in terms of the environmental and personal benefits it provides, the companies must acknowledge
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 benefit and create more opportunities for
people
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 to
work
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 from home
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.
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, taking
education
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 and shopping online does imply in reduction of
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 in
cities
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 as there will be less need for
people
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 to travel. Online classes don't necessarily impact the
education
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 children are receiving, some even believe they are able to grasp things more easily in online classes. I can only see the positive aspect of online
education
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 as it reduces
traffic
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 and
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 reduce the negative impact it has upon the environment
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 as pollution. In conclusion, I firmly agree with the idea of reducing the
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 of
traffic
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 in
cities
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 by reducing the requirement of
people
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 to travel to
work
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,
education
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 or shopping.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commuting patterns
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • E-learning platforms
  • E-commerce
  • Urban planning
  • Public transportation
  • Infrastructure development
  • Green spaces
  • Pedestrianization
  • Carbon footprint
  • Sustainable living
  • Carpooling
  • Cycle lanes
  • Mixed-use development
  • Teleconference
  • Urban sprawl
  • Zoning regulations
  • Traffic congestion
  • City logistics
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