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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays,
people
 have more chances than previous to own accommodation but
this
 is
such
 a huge investment and it may be
the
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one
 of the big decisions in their life. So the reference
informations
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 are quite important to them and
this
 is the beginning point that they start investigating the history of the houses or places that they are going to move in. On the
one
 hand, If someone has to spend a lot of money on something like a house they may make sure that it is located in a good neighbourhood and safe for their family
therefore
 searching for the previous dwellers or criminal history is understandable. High robberies or crime rates will make
people
 feel unsafe and may be disqualified regarding no
one
 would like to live in a bad environment. On the other way, as being curious is
one
 of the nature of humans, it is possible that
people
 may only just wonder who had lived there before them. There are plenty of sources for
people
 or purchasers to find a habitation's profile, most of them searching from the internet which does not take much time and contained many pieces of information.
Moreover
 asking
a
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previous owners, nearby neighbours or sellers in order to receive brief information is
also
the
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 popular method. In conclusion, safety is the main reason that
people
 seek
for
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historical
of
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houses or other accommodations and
this
 process does not take so long time because they can mainly search on the internet or asking from stakeholders like real estate agents, former owners or neighbours.
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