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Should Newspaper not publish personal life of Politicians. DO you agree or disagree.

#newspaper #life #politicians
Publishing the personal
life
 of
politicians
 through news can help the public understand more about
true
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the true
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characters
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characteristics
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 of the leader that
people
 are supporting.
However
, I do not believe that
people
 should totally know about all
aspect
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aspects
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 of
life
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the life
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in
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of
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the
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a
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 politician through
newspaper
publication
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publications
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, in order to have fun. In fact, I would say that the opposite is true. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons why sharing the personal
life
 of
politicians
to
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public
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 can bring negative
effect
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effects
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.
The innocent
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people
 can be suffered from the publication of
politician's
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a politician's
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privite
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private
life
.
For instance
,
family
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the family
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mambers
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members
 of the political leader can be disrupted by the crowd through privacy digging. After, the news spread, complaints from relatives can affect
analytical
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the analytical
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 thinking of the
politicians
 that leading to a serious
consequence
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consequences
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.
However
, if the
newspaper
 can give space to the
politicians
, it can help them to have a clearer mind to focus on making
a
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apply
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good
law
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laws
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. Not only does privacy protection make
political
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the political
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 leader
to
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apply
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work smoothly
,
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but,
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it
also
create
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creates
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 a more harmonious society
to
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with
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 the citizens with different political perspectives.
For example
, the spread of bad news from the governor can
greate
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create
argument
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arguments
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 and conflict between
people
.
Therefore
, the disagreement between
people
 will destroy a peaceful city.
In contrast
, suitable control of the
newspaper
 of exploding
people
's personal
life
 can create a relatively good society, since respecting
people
's privacy is the key to
reduce
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reducing
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 the
unnessesary
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unnecessary
 conflicts in the population. In conclusion, I agree that
newspaper
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newspapers
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sholudn't
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shouldn't
 spread the
privite
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private
life
 of the
people
 who work in
politic
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politics
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, since
the
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innocent
people
 can be protected and it can reduce the conflicts between
people
.
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