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Many people believe that money is a good gift for a teenager while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The
gift
 can be another objective not only
money
 and cash .But it can be toy, education and scholarship. It is an argument between the benefit of giving
money
 to a
teenager
 and a drawback.
However
, I agree that
money
 is a good present for a
teenager
 and I will explain my opinion in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, parents have a long period gap of age than their offspring so the point is parents do not understand their needs.For ,example parents want to give an ordinary book to their son and wish the son will love that
gift
, but maybe a son wants another thing
such
 as an E-book or an iPad.
Therefore
, if families try to reward their children with precious stuff may not be satisfied with a
teenager
's demand.
Secondly
,
money
 is valuable to most people ad
also
 to a
teenager
 because they can buy stuff
that is
 direct to their demand. Not only that benefit but juveniles
also
 can understand the vital of
money
.
For instance
, a youngster has to do a part-time job for collecting
money
 that they can buy some video game or Playstation5 and they still have 100$ to finish,
then
 if their parent gives a birthday present to them that means they complete a mission and can buy the most precious
gift
 for themselves.
Thus
, demand is a base need for every youngster. there will be a good thing with
a
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 freedom that teenagers can choose the
gift
 from their needs. In conclusion, sometimes when you obtain a thing that you do not want but you have to accept it because of a manner and keeping goodwill and after you return to a home you just ignore that
gift
.
Then
 I repeatedly agree with
money
 is a superb
gift
 to teenagers that they can opt and buy what they want.
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