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Some people believe people can not solve environmental problems. Whereas, others believe in individuals are responsible for solving environmental problems

#people #individuals
These days, It is certainly true that one of the essential aims of
protection
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 of
environment
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the environment
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 against degradation is probably saving our planet for
new
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a new
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 generation. There is a common belief that individuals can not work positively to remedy
environmental
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the environmental
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issue
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issues
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. While
,
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 some
people
 say that individuals are in charge of confronting environmental problems. In my view,
people
 have more responsibilities to solve it. I will discuss both sides of the
arguments
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. The
first
 reason why
people
 are not able to solve environmental issues is likely most
burden
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burdens
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 of the
environment
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environmental
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 preservation are carried by authorities. Simply put, government plays
main
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 role to conserve the
environment
 and natural resources and
also
 their law can be effective to solve it. Take
reduction
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 in air pollution
an
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 example, government in
the
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developed countries are imposing a law on car factories to use the cutting edge technologies
such
 as utilizing hydrogen fuel rather than petrol, which result in decreasing air pollution.
In addition
, many who have large
company
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companies
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 tend to do
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illegal activities and run out
natural
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of natural
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 resources.
For example
, some logging companies have been cutting down trees to
product
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produce
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 the furniture, which
take
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heavy
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a heavy
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 toll on the
environment
 like soil erosion.
As a result
, citizens who are environmentally friendly can not combat singly with
this
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these
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 harmful human activities.
However
, individuals could take remedial steps to confront environmental issues.
Firstly
,
people
 can try to be more environmentally friendly. If citizens had felt more
responsibilities
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responsibility
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about
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for
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 conserving our planet, we would be living cleaner
environment
. A good illustration of
this
 will be using less heavy
machineries
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machinery
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 in cultivation, farmers make up the vast majority of the population. they are using too many tractors for cultivation which
lead
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leads
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 to soil-compacting and erosion.
Secondly
,
people
 can conduct a campaign to raise public awareness. campaigner will have
constructive
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a constructive
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 impact on the
preventing
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prevention
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 of environmental
degradations
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degradation
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.
For instance
, on
the
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social media like
instagram
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, some videos have been published in order
preserve
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to preserve
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 wildlife
habitat
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habitats
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 where is near the nuclear power station . In conclusion,
although
,
government
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the government
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 and large
company
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companies
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 play a crucial role in protecting the
environment
,
people
 can have
more
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a more
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 constructive
effect
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effects
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 on it by running campaigns and being more eco-friendly.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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