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Fast food is a part of life in some places. Some people think that this has bad effects on lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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For some
places
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 around the world, eating fast
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 can be an integral part of their lives. Some
people
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 believe that eating fast
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 can have severe negative impacts on
people
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's lifestyles and diets. On the other ,hand others believe that eating fast
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 is completely fine. I concur, that eating
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 from
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 joints could lead to a negative impact on
people
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's lifestyles and diets. Eating fast
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 once in a blue moon is normal,
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, eating fast
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 on a regular basis can lead to negative effects on
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's lifestyle and health.
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, eating fast
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 once in three to four weeks is fine but some
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 crave
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 from a fast
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 joint like Burger King or Dominos regularly, on doing so,
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's health could go at risk.
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, the
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 at
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places
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 doesn't suit their diet
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and
people
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 could have stomach aches or even
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 poisoning. There are many joints which
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 offer healthy
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 like Subway, which claims to offer healthy
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 to their customers
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 eating from
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places
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 could
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 have a bad impact on our lives as sometimes these
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 don't make
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 from fresh ingredients.
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 of going out to eat
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 from
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places
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,
people
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 should try to make
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 by themselves.
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,
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 of going to a burger fast
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 joint, one can try to make burgers by themselves on their own at home, through which they can learn how
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 foods are made by using fresh ingredients. In conclusion, eating
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 from a fast
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 joint on a regular basis could lead to negative effects on our healthstyle and diet.
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,
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 can eat
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 from
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places
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 once a month.
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 of going to these ,
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 they should try to eat healthily and if they crave
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some
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 they should try to make themselves at home.
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