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In modern era, it is easy to sell, buy and work with other people through internet. But others against it. Do you think this is positive trend or negative trend.

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It is often believed by many that, in
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 contemporary era, it would be easy to run
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 via websites.
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, others think in
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 reverse manner. In my perspective, it is a positive trend. My opinion is justified
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 with reasons and examples. To commence, the foremost argument to prove my stance is the internet is the fundamental approach to connecting markets with consumers. To elaborate on
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, in recent days it can be observed that many
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 are growing at a rapid pace. The Internet provides platforms for employers in order to buy and sell goods worldwide.
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, it
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 gives huge network connectivity. By means of online marketing, information on new products can be spread among people across the world. For an instance, a Shopify website is popular in developing nations which helps Individuals to grow their online business by giving advisory about paid promotions of the items through online portals on various social applications. These things can be done by computer at home without going outside
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, it would be convenient and easy to run a new business and work with different clients by using modern cyberspace.
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, others claim that it would be extremely arduous for many people.
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 it requires a piece of specific knowledge about software and strategies to expand
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, it is
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 risky for people who are illiterate. They may not able to co-operate with numerous sites simultaneously.
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, these days cybercrime has increased
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, appropriate instructions and planning are necessary to overcome
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 problem. Despite the few risks associated with working via the
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internet there are myriad advantages.
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, it creates
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 around the globe.
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 the e-commerce sector brings many vacancies for mankind in a community
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 as an affiliate marketer and management jobs.
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, it may help youngsters to start their careers.
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 a nominal amount of material support is required to start the business. Most young entrepreneurs prefer to use websites to grow their own
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 and earn more money.
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, according to the survey conducted by the World economical ,
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 it is proven that e-commerce websites are growing faster and generating more revenue for overall sections. In conclusion, notwithstanding there are few demerits
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 as risk related to working online- cybercrime the benefits of better connection as well as creating job opportunities can not be overlooked.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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