IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Coronavirus pandemic exposes social inequalities. Do you agree?

#coronavirus #pandemic #inequalities
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The
coronavirus
Use synonyms
 pandemic has surfaced social differences over the world.I completely agree with the above statement and going to elaborate
further
Linking Words
 on
this
Linking Words
 topic in the
next
Linking Words
 paragraphs as global
coronavirus
Use synonyms
infection
Use synonyms
 has made clear, how much gap exists between societies depending on their geographical location,resources available and commitment of local governments to their civilians. World-wide
infection
Use synonyms
 of
coronavirus
Use synonyms
 disturbed people all over the globe and coping with it was never an easy task .Most countries needed to go through lock-down for preventing the spread of
infection
Use synonyms
 and save the
life
Use synonyms
 of their citizens.During lock-down number of people have trouble getting their food while the other class spend money on entertainment.Workers use to work day to day remained jobless and their
life
Use synonyms
 depended on government help and social support.wealthier nations came up with unemployment insurance plans to transfer money to their workforce while they remained at home due to lock-down.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 labourers in
third
Linking Words
 world countries got no help at all and went bankrupt. The poor class struggled for
life
Use synonyms
 survival from
infection
Use synonyms
 as well as economic crisis due to loss of income and work.Rich people were missing their social
life
Use synonyms
,parties and travelling as a travel ban was in effect during the pandemic period.High-end category individuals were concerned about their luxuries while the low end was fighting for
life
Use synonyms
 survival.One end of society was struggling for basic
life
Use synonyms
 needs and another part was getting irritated due to home boundness where they can do nothing for pleasure. So,considering the above-mentioned facts it is obvious that
coronavirus
Use synonyms
 global
infection
Use synonyms
 made social inequalities more apparent than any time before.It showed the real face of social depth between its categories and their relations to each other during times of crisis.
Submitted by mahesh029 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: